People often ask what sort of changes take place between online draft of the Innkeeper and the “real” book. Most of it is fine-tuning, which explains exactly nothing, so here is an example. I think this is Chapter 6, the scene where Arland fixes his armor.
“You think Sean was in Nexus.”
Arland nodded. “The Merchants employed many mercenaries.”
“Would it be such a bad thing if he was?”
“Nexus changes people,” Arland said. “I’m concerned only for your safety.”
“In that case she should be concerned about you as well,” Maud said from the doorway. “After all, you’ve done two tours, Lord Marshal.”
Arland raised his head and studied her.
My sister walked in and put her armor on the table. The inn’s wall opened and the repair kit Arland had given her slipped out. She caught the heavy box and placed it next to the armor.
“I’m a knight. I’ve been conditioned to handle the rigors of war from childhood.”
Maud’s spread her armor out, her eyes half closed under her long eyelashes as she surveyed it. “You would be surprised how many knights break under the rigors of war, my lord. They break and they run, as their honor lies dying behind them.”
“I do not run, my lady.”
Maud arched her eyebrow. If I didn’t know, I could’ve sworn she was a vampire. “I have run, my lord. And I would do it again, if the circumstances called for it. Honor can’t keep my daughter alive, but I can.”
“There is a difference between blindly fleeing for your life and a strategic retreat because the battle is lost,” Arland said.