Paragraph Trouble
Paragraph #30
Next, Author’s note: the protagonist is twelve Mesmerized by harsh, emerald eyes staring back at me, I didn’t notice his hand until it was sliding down my shoulder. Even then, I didn’t look down at it. He walked a few feet away and joined the other two boys. Disappointed, I realized my arm felt wet. [...]
Paragraph #29
Happy Friday, The power of attraction between them had quadrupled since they’d last met and they escaped the restaurant separately as discreetly as The Ivy’s entrance, circled by paparazzi, would permit. A text message and two black cab rides later, they were reunited in his flat, snogging like hormones-driven teenagers, carelessly tearing off articles of [...]
Paragraphs
Jess asks: The Paragraphs you help edit in your blog posts, do people just send them to you and you randomly pick them or is it just one person you are helping with their story writing? An embarassingly long time ago I offered to critique 1 paragraph of 100 words on the blog. I opened [...]
Paragraph #28
Next, It started with a prickle at the back of her neck. Lifting her head, she scanned the crowded bar quickly, assessing each person for danger before moving on to the next. A quick glance showed her no one out of the ordinary, just the usual smattering of disgruntled workers and tourists that thought visiting [...]
Paragraph #27
Morning! You only felt fear when you had something to lose. That phrase repeated through my head, especially when it seemed that the world was a living, breathing being, constantly remaking itself on every inhale, every exhale. A being that seriously enjoyed fucking with me. Good paragraph. The first sentence creates tension – what does [...]
Paragraph #26
Moving on: Jaered breathed in, smelling the tang of the few humans who dared walk among the vampires, and smirked to himself. Excitement, fear, and that ineffable thing that screamed ‘prey’ to all his instincts. Beneath it all, he gloated. Baby vampires like himself, younger than five years, weren’t supposed to be in a place [...]
